Sunny afternoons didn't matter nor chilly winter evenings. What mattered was how many of them have turned up and what next.
Growing up in a small town has its advantages. The narrow lanes to run around, open fields to run , trees to climb, abandoned houses to hide and never be found.
The smoke coming out of the industrial towers darkened the dusk skyline. The street lights were out. The birds flying north indicated that it was time to say goodbye to friends and walk home. Mamma would be waiting with a hot cuppa in hand. The school bag would be open and homework would be laid out. Next weeks maths test was on her mind.
She said goodbye to her friends as if they would never meet again. She smirked and knew very well that she would be back tomorrow, running the same length, hair distorted and feet dirty.
It was a short walk home but felt long with the torn sandals and pebbled road. Winter was approaching. She felt the chill and draped her hands around for comfort.
A little ahead she saw a shadow move and heard a cry. Somehow the sky had become lighter. She wondered who it could be, the lane was normally empty at this time. She was concentrating on the formulas that had to be mug up when she heard her name. Her heart skipped a beat. It sounded familiar, she turned to find her mother. She asked 'What are you doing here. I was coming home ? But her mother just cried silently and said ' I came to say goodbye'. Saying this her mother hugged her.
When she woke up, she was surrounded by a lot of people, some didn't have hands, some without legs, eyes popped out. She felt sick and hot. She tried to move, but couldn't. She looked down and realized that her feet were gone. She was shocked and started calling for her Mamma. How would she go to play tomorrow if her legs were missing, and where was she? what about school?
Suddenly her eye caught a newspaper flying by. The headline read 'All left asleep in sleepy city by blast'.
Growing up in a small town has its advantages. The narrow lanes to run around, open fields to run , trees to climb, abandoned houses to hide and never be found.
The smoke coming out of the industrial towers darkened the dusk skyline. The street lights were out. The birds flying north indicated that it was time to say goodbye to friends and walk home. Mamma would be waiting with a hot cuppa in hand. The school bag would be open and homework would be laid out. Next weeks maths test was on her mind.
She said goodbye to her friends as if they would never meet again. She smirked and knew very well that she would be back tomorrow, running the same length, hair distorted and feet dirty.
It was a short walk home but felt long with the torn sandals and pebbled road. Winter was approaching. She felt the chill and draped her hands around for comfort.
A little ahead she saw a shadow move and heard a cry. Somehow the sky had become lighter. She wondered who it could be, the lane was normally empty at this time. She was concentrating on the formulas that had to be mug up when she heard her name. Her heart skipped a beat. It sounded familiar, she turned to find her mother. She asked 'What are you doing here. I was coming home ? But her mother just cried silently and said ' I came to say goodbye'. Saying this her mother hugged her.
When she woke up, she was surrounded by a lot of people, some didn't have hands, some without legs, eyes popped out. She felt sick and hot. She tried to move, but couldn't. She looked down and realized that her feet were gone. She was shocked and started calling for her Mamma. How would she go to play tomorrow if her legs were missing, and where was she? what about school?
Suddenly her eye caught a newspaper flying by. The headline read 'All left asleep in sleepy city by blast'.
Nicely written..the storyline is absolutely awesome, which made the climax very interesting..n yesss.. its scary. :)
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Storyline and climax is good. The first few paragraphs need editing though.They seem to drag and tend to get boring a little. A few edits here and there, would have made this stellar piece. So I give 3.5 stars out of 5 to it :)
ReplyDeleteNice one Pooh...Worth reading n a bit scary too. Dont forget to add ur sig.. :-P Continue writing..Hope to see a new sunshine in nxt blog. ALB.
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